I made this cover letter below. Let me know what can be changed/added or modified. Your help is highly appreciated. Going tomorrow morning on job search.
Dear Manager,
I've been purchasing tools and spare parts from your store for months, admiring the vast selection of products you got there and wishing I could work there. But until now it wasn't possible. Today, however, I'm in a position to apply for a part time/casual retail salespersons job providing you got vacancies.
I decided to write a cover letter to introduce myself and then ask for an in-person meeting to discuss what you are looking for. I currently work as a part time Mechanic for Subaru ******* and study at ******** completing my Advanced Diploma of Automotive Management. Therefore my availability is limited only for the weekends (Saturday and Sunday full day) until December.
I have worked in a few automotive workshops, working on a vast range of Japanese and European vehicles. Searching for correct reliable spare parts was one of the biggest objectives I had at work, which made me apply for this job and to learn how to provide the customers with the correct reliable spare part/tool according to their need.
Furthermore in the past as a Subway restaurant supervisor I have learned a lot about customer service and how a happy customer will promote the business whereas an unhappy customer could actually demote the business.
In overseas I have a background where I worked on a lot on cars and doing car sales as my father owns a car yard, hence the reason I became a mechanic.
Now I seek an opportunity to further develop my customer service and managing skills and I think that this would be a better career path in the long run. I hope that my knowledge in vehicles would be an advantage for this job.
If you'd like to schedule an interview with me, and I hope you do, please call me on ********* and state a date and a time and I'll be there.
Sincerely,
**********
okay, if you don't mind, i've copied your letter and fixed some of the grammar.
Dear Manager,
I've been purchasing tools and spare parts from your store for months, admiring the vast selection of products you have got there and wishing I could work there. But until now it wasn't possible. Today, however, I'm in a position to apply for a part time/casual retail salespersons job providing you have vacancies.
I decided to write a cover letter to introduce myself and then ask for an in-person meeting to discuss what you are looking for. I currently work as a part time Mechanic for Subaru ******* and study at ******** completing my Advanced Diploma of Automotive Management. Therefore my availability is limited only for the weekends (Saturday and Sunday full day) until December.
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I have worked in a few automotive workshops, working on a vast range of Japanese and European vehicles. Searching for correct reliable spare parts was one of the biggest objectives I had at work, which made me apply for this job. Also I would like to learn how to provide the customers with the correct and reliable spare part/tool according to their need.
Furthermore in the past, I was a Subway restaurant supervisor I have learned a lot about customer service and how a happy customer will promote the business whereas an unhappy customer could actually demote the business.
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Overseas I have a background where I worked a lot on carsand helping with car sales as my father owns a car yard, hence the reason I became a mechanic.
Now I seek an opportunity to further develop my customer service and managing skills and I think that this would be a better career path in the long run. I hope that my knowledge in vehicles would be an advantage for this job.
If you'd like to schedule an interview with me, and I hope you do, please call me on ********* and state a date and a time and I'll be there.
Sincerely,
Hopefully that helps, and good luck with your job hunting!
THIS IS THE NEW VERSION BELOW:
Dear Manager
I've been purchasing tools and spare parts from your store for months, admiring the vast selection of products you have and hoping there was a chnce i would get the opporunity to work there, until now it wasn't possible. However today I am in a position to apply for a part time/casual retail salespersons position providing you have a vacancy.
I decided to write a cover letter to introduce myself and then ask for an in-person meeting to discuss what you are looking for. I currently work as a part time Mechanic for Subaru ******* and study at ******** completing my Advanced Diploma of Automotive Management. Therefore my availability is limited only for the weekends (Saturday and Sunday full day) until December.
I have worked in a few automotive workshops, working on a vast range of Japanese and European vehicles. Searching for correct reliable spare parts was one of the biggest objectives I had at work, which is what was so appealing to me about this job, aswell as the oppotunity to learn how to provide the customers with their desired spare part/tool.
Furthermore in the past as a Subway restaurant supervisor I have learned a lot about customer service and how a happy customer will promote the business whereas an unhappy customer could actually demote the business.
Overseas I have a background which allowed me to work on a vast amount of cars aswell as key involement in car sales as my father owns a car yard, hence the reason I became a mechanic.
Now I seek an opportunity to further develop my customer service and managing skills and I think that this would be a better career path in the long run. I hope that my knowledge in vehicles would be an advantage for this job.
If you'd like to schedule an interview with me, and I hope you do, please call me on ********* and state a date and a time and I'll be there.
The way your english was great to begin only a few grammactical errors. hope you like the improved version above.
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